5
café 

41
"I'm sorry. Actually, . . ."

48
Good grief, everyone's all "Jewelpet this, Jewelpet that."

70
Good day! We're from the "Do your best, Japan" Diet Association!

128
Just one exclamation mark.

146
Same as 128.

155
Same

164
Read the suggestion on the script. You could go with "So beautiful."

171
One mark.

186
Don't capitalize "a."

182
Oh, mirror, tell me who in this world is the most beautiful—no, pigutiful?

187
One mark.

194
Piggy beauty—that's my sin.

207
When differente characters same the same thing (even if they don't say it at the exact same time) one line suffices. In those "10 points!" lines above, just 1 line would've been enough (granted, the timing would've stayed the same, as if they were those 4-5 lines).

209
flash -> flesh

235
the piggy beauty of the world—

324
One mark.

354
I'd use a colon instead of an em dash.